Being healthy, whatever way you choose to define it,
starts from the mind. No doubt about it, the term good health varies in meaning
from person to person. However, preparing yourself to follow a certain
lifestyle begins in the mind. It’s believed that a person is healthy if he or
she works out and eats their greens. However, I disagree, a huge step in
becoming healthy and most importantly staying healthy, is building self-esteem.
Self-esteem and confidence are huge contributors to self-love, to untimely
raise against what society deems us to be wrong. Bodybuilders Roxanne Edwards
and Cassils strive to better themselves as individuals while achieving their
idolized body figure.
Roxanne Edwards is a hardcore bodybuilder and inevitably
makes people take a second glance at her muscular physic. Edwards physical goal
is being “Peeled,” Her aim is to have people see her as, “…
when you look at me and you can look at me and you can see right through me.
You can look at stuff on me and see the fibers in the muscle moving underneath
my skin.” Being able to leg press more than one
thousand pounds, there is no doubt that she is not physically unfit. Throughout
the interview with S. Adrian Massey in DISMagazine, she carries her confidence
on her shoulder, freely expressing her thoughts and ideas about her body. She
acknowledges that society has a bias for women to have certain bodily features
such as breasts with a petite frame. However that does not affect how she
embraces her femininity. Mentally, her self-confidence is what drives
her to be what others call her “inspiring.” “I’m not putting a handcuff on your
potential. The only person doing that is you. I just chose to unshackle mine.” She states that she’ll let her body, “speak for itself”
and after hearing and seeing her through an interview and
photo-shoots, I don’t need to meet her to know that she is overall content with
what she believes.
Heather Cassils, a personal trainer wanted to test
social expectations through her transformation of her transgender body.
Committing to a project where she must bulk up 20+ pounds of muscle in less than
a 23-week period by the aid of steroids and collapsing her process in a small
video. Though she does not approve of the use of steroids, she solely did it
for the act of revealing, “society’s obsessed with extremes.” Her outcomes were
successful, attracting attention to what she describe as “freaky androgyny.” Men would bully about her breasts at the gym and at one
point wanted to arm wrestle or fight
her. She challenged the way society looks at a female body, “I wanted this project to be a reflection of the value that is placed on
the surface and what goes into constructing that surface. “She extended herself from: force-feeding to extreme
fatigue and lost of her flexibility to prove her point. That society will
always be attentive of people who oppose the social norm. The ability to think
outside of what society wants you to think is an aspect of building this
self-confidence to rise above objectors.
Socially, we must not commode to how society depicts
how we ought to be but rather stand
for what you believe if right. To have confidence and an individual mind to run
one’s self, is the path to have a true health. Combining both physical and
mental health, can create what people may call inspire and original.
1- The idea of healthy can be summed up by working out and eating right, but that is not everything. Self esteem is crucial in becoming healthy and maintaining a healthy life style.
ReplyDelete2- This thesis succeeds at making a debatable assertion since it provides a counter argument. I really enjoyed the fact that this is about society and strains the importance of mental health. More of an interpretation on Roxanne's interview would greatly enhance the quality of the paragraph.
3- The body of the essay doesn't really discuss the topic of self esteem. It mentions how they are accepting of the physique but not much about self esteem. the only mention of society is in the clincher of the third paragraph.
4- The conclusion doesn't discuss any part of the essay, it is just an condensed opinion. The idea of the paper is really good! Please discuss more about society and what the perfect body is and how society defines it. Also check the font to make sure everything is the same throughout the paper.
1) I like the thesis statement and I would leave it as it is.
ReplyDelete2) The thesis statement is well established. It provides a hypothesis and disagrees with another hypothesis, which could be proved afterwards in the body paragraphs.
3) The thesis statement talks about how self-esteem is a major tool for maintaining one's healthiness. Even though the body paragraphs describe the importance of self-esteem as a bodybuilder, it does not connect and explain what a definition of "health" really is.
4) Talk about Roxanne and Cassilis in the conclusion and show how they connect to the thesis statement.